Where can submit this short romatic fiction story?
I have to agree, I only read the first paragraph. Bad grammar is a turn off to me wanting to read more. You need to improve the grammar and be less vague about details. It sounds more like you’re talking to someone telling them this story – but if you’re writing you need to be clearer and let the reader know what you (the narrator) are thinking and feeling as you tell the story. You need, instead of just stating a bunch of facts as they happened, to describe surroundings and feelings. Don’t jump from one event to the next, smooth the transition. Don’t say “he said” “then I said” “he did X because Y” etc. For instance: Bad Grammar: It was a Saturday night, me and Jason’s five year anniversary. It was a Saturday night, Jason and my five year anniversary. Bad Grammar: He was taking me to some restaurant that he refused to tell me where it was. He was taking me to a restaurant, he wouldn’t tell me which one. Needs to be smoothed out: We were driving and he said he needed to stop by the ban
