Is my Speaking & Listening Coursework good?
To be honest, I think you need to expand your arguments much more by bringing in additional facts (as noted above). Your vocabulary is rather simple. Although there are some good phrases and words (‘glorified jumble sale’ , ‘despise’) in your piece you do not really give enough information or detail about any of your 3 pet hates. You should say the most about your first pet hate. A competent Y6 child could write something very similar to what you have posted (you do not state your age, but as you use the term ‘coursework’ I assume you are Y9+?). To attain a ‘good’ level/grade you need to spend more time on this, using a variety of sentence structures, a wider range of vocabulary and more description and detail.
