How is this as an introduction to an essay about Fahrenheit 451?
I will be commenting on the essays from what I was taught in English class. The introduction should be used to grab the reader’s attention, have one or a few sentences about the content for each of the body paragraphs, and ends with the thesis statement. I think that the paragraph is too specific. It gave way too much specific details that should be used as specific details in the body paragraphs. After I read the introduction, I felt that there was no need to read the actual essay because all the information has already been presented. The attention grabber was good, but kind of long. The transition was well done; the intro flowed from one idea into the next. I would recommend simplifying it and using some of the specific details for the body paragraphs.
