Could somebody please tell me how i can improve this paragraph of my Descriptive writing coursework?
It was Wednesday morning, and, like always, I reluctantly left my bed to the thought of school. I carefully left the room, trying to avoid making any noise that would awake my brother. As I crept towards the door, I soon found that the narrow pathway through Harry’s board games and clothes was far more treacherous then ever before. Each step was accompanied by the screeching sound of wizened floor boards beneath. As I approached the final stretch, just arms length from the door, I stumbled, knocking over a four foot tower of toys. The sound resonated from the huge clatter and the echo raced around the room as the toys pummeled the floor. I immediately glanced over to Harry’s bunk. Surprisingly, it was immaculate; the covers were pulled tightly over the edges, and the pillows lay peacefully on top. “Where is Harry?” I yelled. I left the room immediately and proceeded through the cold, soulless corridors of Brymore Boarding school. Ok, so in that paragraph, I corrected a few grammar erro
